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JULY 2006
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Greetings from Wordfeeder.com Copywriting and Marketing.

I hope you had a relaxing and fun-filled Fourth (and are now getting back into the swing of making money and serving your customers exceptionally well!).

Newsletter highlights:

The Jargon Debate is always a heated one. Have a gander at this month's feature, Can Jargon Increase Your Bottom Line?

For fun: Download the Corporate and Marketing Jargon Dictionary from Wordfeeder.com now!

Another hot topic: Getting your customers to come to you, brought to you by marketing expert, business coach and professional speaker Kevin Stirtz.

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copywriting feature

Can Jargon Increase Your Bottom Line?

by Dina Giolitto

Did you ever read a web page or blog post that smacks of self-importance... and then read it again only to realize that it's merely a series of empty statements? This trick of speaking volumes on a particular subject but in effect saying nothing, is achieved with the addition of jargon into your web copy. Yes, the web is overrun with jargon, or meaningless business/marketing/tech terminology, designed at least in part to confuse and convolute real meaning even as it attracts, delights and mystifies. Below, the textbook definition of jargon:

jar•gon (jär g n) n.
1. Nonsensical, incoherent, or meaningless talk.
2. A hybrid language or dialect; a pidgin.
3. The specialized or technical language of a trade, profession, or similar group.
Speech or writing having unusual or pretentious vocabulary, convoluted phrasing, and vague meaning.

Source: The American Heritage® Dictionary of the English Language, Fourth Edition
Copyright © 2000 by Houghton Mifflin Company.

Some examples of jargon used today (for more, check out our Jargon Dictionary download now!)

Best in class - first rate (not unlike pedigree dogs). "We are considered best in class for our industry."

Dialogue (as a verb.) - to talk, discuss. "Shall we dialogue in person, or would you rather talk over the phone?"

Leapfrog - to hurdle past your competition. "I'm guessing that KFC will leapfrog Boston Market after the raging success of their 'Famous Bowls' campaign."

Despite its rampant presence in nearly every piece of business communication we receive today, there is great controversy surrounding the use of jargon. Some marketers swear up and down that they don't let a word of jargon within ten feet of their copy. Others can't seem to type a simple email without at least six buzzwords finding their way in. So which is the wiser style of writing for your own web business: jargonless, or jargon-esque? Let us probe the topic a bit more deeply, to uncover a reasonable answer.

Jargon, as it is described in definition 1 above, remains an empowering communication tool. For the most part, jargon leaves plenty of contextual wiggle room. Examine any legal contract or set of regulations and you'll notice that beneath all the authoritative-sounding wording lies mostly double-talk, circular reasoning and empty statements. This is commonly known as jargon; and, despite our distaste for the vagueness, it's a vastly needed legal escape hatch.

In a world where people sue fast food corporations for being the "cause" of their poor health and get away with it, business owners are now taking extra precaution in their communication to avoid making statements that could lead to lawsuits and financial loss. Thus, legal copy is not really the set-in-stone ruling that it appears to be, but actually a series of vague, intimidating remarks meant to confuse and/or discourage the reader from pursuing legal action. Is this done purposely in the copywriting? Absolutely.

The same "mumbo jumbo" lawyer tactic of "empowering your voice" yet making no claims, is used in the majority of professionally-written advertising and marketing materials that we see every day. From puffery-filled headlines to copy that paints a picture but offers no promises, the world's most prominent ad campaigns are riddled with jargon. And if the meant-to-impress-with-faux-assurance copy isn't enough, we can rely on jargon-filled, small-print disclaimers to blatantly contradict every implied claim that was just made in the body copy of the ad. It seems that despite its blatant lack of sincerity, consumers are highly responsive to this type of communication. What a puzzle indeed, but who are we to question? After all, the need to make use of existing jargon and invent clever new jargon keeps copywriters, advertisers and marketers gainfully employed year after year, decade after decade.

A second reason why jargon continues to play such a prominent role in our everyday business communication: fellow humans need to feel as though they're a member of the herd (here, I refer to jargon as it is defined in section two, above). Business or corporate jargon denotes someone who is "in the know," or a player on the "Us Team" in the imaginary battle of Us and Them. And even as much as we poke fun at people who speak in jargon, we tend to take them more seriously, as jargon differentiates an expert from a knowledge-lacking layman.

If there is any doubt as to the authenticity of a company, you need only look for telltale corporate-speak or tech jargon to help you decide whether they are in fact someone competent enough to do business with. So, while many marketers pride themselves on the ability to keep their copy jargon-free, there is no denying that a far larger percentage of businesses willingly pepper their daily communication with jargon and pass muster with their would-be critics because of it. Indeed, jargon is a recognizable method of conveying one's thoughts in a sterile, savvy and business-like manner. Jargon performs its job of gaining the professional confidence and trust of your readership like no other copywriting trick can.

Certainly, as a new business owner with a small client base and perhaps a set of high-minded ideals, you may feel wildly opposed to the use of jargon in your advertising. Yet, if you're looking ahead to significant expansion, consider jargon as a communication tool meant to keep you out of legal hot water as it defines you as an authority in your particular niche. The key of course, is to avoid going overboard with trite, meaningless and pretentious verbiage. Learn how to speak from the heart and offer real, valuable information to your readers while utilizing a small portion of jargon to avoid those communication pitfalls that could mean financial disaster down the road.

Another important practical use of jargon is the level of professional whom it attracts. If you speak to your readers in casual language, you will tend to draw in casual-minded persons. And while these may in fact be just the type of genuine folks whom you'd like to surround yourself, "laid back" generally equates with "non-enterprising" and low- to no- budget. Since you're likely seeking respectable rates for your products and services, buttoning up your image with a bit of corporate approved jargon is probably a sound idea. Add those highly recognizable, jargon-rich statements to your web copy that make you seem somehow untouchable, and you will no doubt begin to draw in a higher caliber of client or customer.

In the same way that you once may have felt strange donning your first corporate blazer, slipping into aloof and pretentious-sounding jargon might seem awkward and "not what you're all about." Even so, something as simple as adding a few business buzzwords could mean finally landing customers who can afford to pay you the going rate (as opposed to those "really nice" people who make you feel great about yourself but don't contribute to your bottom line).

It's ultimately your choice whether to use jargon in your web copy and advertising materials. It has been my professional experience that jargon is approprate some of the time, while at other moments it just seems far too stuffy and formal. Consider what you're selling; consider the image you'd like to portray; consider your target audience and how they communicate; and finally, consider the context in which you're having the discussion. It may be okay to slip in a few instances of jargon on your home page to add credibility and impressive language; but a bit overboard to never speak to your customers and colleagues in a warm, honest, fallible and jargon-free way.

When in doubt, remember this: jargon attracts new customers; humanity helps you keep them.

Copyright 2006 Dina Giolitto. All rights reserved.

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Get your customers to come to you

By Kevin Stirtz


Several years ago we were up north for Christmas. We had a small group that year so the normally over-crowded dinner table had a few empty spaces.

Because of this, one person in our group thought we should knock on the doors of people in the neighborhood to see if there was anyone spending Christmas alone. If they were, we could invite them to join us.

It seemed like a nice idea.

For a variety of reasons, we did not do this. I think mainly because it would have been an unusual thing to do. In our part of the world, people usually don't invite strangers to Christmas dinner.

It reminded me a little of door-to-door sales.

Not that we would have been selling anything. But other aspects of cold calling were there.

For instance, even though our intentions would have been good, we still would have been interrupting people on an important day. Also, if they had been alone, why would they want to join us (complete strangers)? for Christmas dinner? Maybe they liked being alone. Who were we to judge? And why assume they even celebrated Christmas? Maybe they didn't.

Or maybe inviting them to join us (because they were alone) would only serve to remind them how alone (and lonely) they were.

So, for all the good intentions, there were some downsides to this idea.

The same is true when we seek to promote our business or sell our products and services.

We have all the good intentions in the world.

But if we interrupt people, invade their space, disrupt their days and force ourselves on them, then we're usually doing more harm than good.

People get too many offers and commercials and other marketing clutter coming at them every day. Some people estimate we get over 3,000 commercial messages every day.

No matter what the number is, we all have more than enough people and companies telling us why we should buy from them. We don't need or want one more. We probably won't pay attention to them anyway.

So, if you want to reach people who will pay attention, focus on people who are interested in what you offer.

You do this by letting them come to you.

And they come to you when they find out you have something they are interested in.

They learn this because you find ways to put your information, your message out where they will look for it. And because you give them useful, valuable information that focused on helping them meet their needs (not on you meeting your sales goals).

Keep your focus on them. How can you help them?

Do this and they will find you. They will want to talk with you. They'll give you permission to have a conversation with them that might just lead to them becoming a customer.

And they'll never once feel you "sold" them anything. In fact they'll thank you for helping them buy from you.

About the Author:

Kevin Stirtz has developed a unique concept called “Blow Up Your Business.” He speaks to groups of professionals and business owners who want to attract more customers and put more money in their pocket. Kevin can be reached at http://www.KevinStirtz.com or 952-212-4681.

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1. I consider my professional copywriting skills to be:

45.9% chose answer b. "Intermediate. I've served as the unofficial copywriter at my marketing job, and/or I do a little freelance on the side."

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a. "Learning basic principles and traditional methods of advertising taught by the great masters," and...

b. "I'd like to know the difference between Web and Print advertising."

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86.5% answered FALSE.

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75% picked b. "Visual. I'd prefer to receive lessons and exercises via email or by way of a private website that I can log onto whenever I'd like and do the exercises at my leisure."

6. The best thing about the last copywriting course I took online was:

Answers ranged from "taking a course at my own pace and leisure" to "hearing an mp3 recording", to "the power of action-based verbs", and "a lesson that was based on real live results".

7. The one thing that I wish I could have received more of during the last copywriting course I took online was:

Most common responses: live one-on-one Q&A, instructor feedback, up-to-date technical info

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37% selected answer b: "one copywriting lesson at a time, with the freedom to pick and choose the ones that sound interesting to me."

9. The one thing that remains a mystery about copywriting for the web is:

Answers included: long sales letter psychology, accurate result feedback, the backstage process of writing copy, copy that sells without being pushy, keyword balance, finding clients who pay for quality work, and the secret to persuasion

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